He writes a song for her:
Verse 1
Verse 2
Verse 3
Key Change
Chorus X 2

She writes a story for him:
Attention-Grabbing Action-Based Opening
Cleverly-Woven Exposition
Establishing of Character Motivation to Move Story Forward
Prose Prose Prose
Dialogue Dialogue Dialogue
Building of Tension
Revealing of Turning Point

He tries to persuade her:
Evidentiary Support
Emotional Appeal
Call to Action

She gives a rebuttal:
Fear and Concerns
Emotion Emotion Emotion

He sends an unrelenting email:
Pity-Seeking Tactics
Barrage of Flattering Statements

She concedes in a reply:
Lapping Up of Compliments
Loyalty Proclamations
Flashing the Green Light

He mails the application:
Return Address
Tri-Folded Packet
Spit-Sealed Envelope
Two Patriotic Postage Stamps

She answers “NO” (in her name) to the application questions he cannot:
Are you under indictment?
Have you ever been convicted of a felony?
Are you a fugitive from justice?
Are you an unlawful user of depressants, stimulants, or narcotics?
Have you ever been adjudicated mentally defective?

He does not text back confirming the completion of the plan:
Last Active 6 Days Ago

She reads the heading in the local paper:
Wanted Fugitive and Local Man Both Found Dead with Gunshot Wounds

She writes a diary entry:
Expressions of Grief and Loss
Descriptions of Peace and Relief Over Death of Former Abuser
Prayer of Reunion in Heaven with Her Hero, The Addict, Her Love


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      1. Hey, Rachel, sorry for the late response. I’ve been taking a hiatus, and have only posted a collab series — political decor tips. Everything is well, I hope you are well too. Love reading you, always 😉


  1. They speak. The same ol’ same ol’. He pleads, she listens, fortunately comes to her senses. You can anybody on the internet, regardless of who you really are. Some things never change. Well done.


    1. Jazakallahu khair, M! my blog love love loves youuuuu! And I love you back for sure girl! Thank you so much for the compliment. Would you believe I had a dream and woke up in the middle of the night with the idea for this story told in this style exactly? It’s that amaazeee? That’s where a lot of my ideas come from. Dreams. Allah Hafiz! I hope you are always well.


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