Doesn’t everybody love
Great news?
And I’ve finally got a bit to share.
Are you sitting down?
It actually involves you
And you’re no doubt
To feel proud when you
Find out.
Congratulations are in order,
I think, because you did it!
Precisely you aimed your daggers,
And achieved.
And you’re a man of
Goals,
Devoted, even when it appeared
Bleak.
You see, I’ve just spent
Nine hundred hours
Crying.
No lie.
Wanted you to realize; who am I
To deny
You of the pride you will have
About crushing me
So complete,
So flat,
That there ain’t no coming back!
My favorite, floral blouse
Destroyed
By sorrow, mucus,
And blood
From my nose.
I didn’t plan or bring tissue
But I did find a private corner.
Forgive me, I digress.
This isn’t about me.
It’s about how impressed
They’ll be
And how pleased
You must feel.
So accomplished,
Triumphant,
At my willing expense.
Very emotional, 🙁🙁.
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Ah good! Then the poem did what I wanted it to do! Thank you friend!!! I appreciate your time and your feedback! 🙂
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No, I am kidding. (I have to say this to feel good). 🙃😉
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AHAHAHAHHAHHA ;P
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About to upload a poem in about half an hour, the conversation, which is the last part of the series that I was making so called monologue, would love to receive your inputs or feedback.?
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I will be sure to read it! I am happy that you asked and happy to give feedback.
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It would all be mine pleasure. Thanks Rachel. Is in late night at your place?
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No it’s only 4pm here. I’m guessing it’s around 2am there. Am I right?
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Yeah, it’s 2:39 am I must go to sleep, but I have to type what I jot down!! 😴😴😴
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Yeah, it’s 2:40am now I must go to sleep, but I have to type what I jotted down , where do you live btw?
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U.S. in the Midwest
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Rachel I uploaded it, have a look, good night!!!!
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Want me to get my old cellmate Bubba after him?
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HA hahahahhaha! That is the comment of the week right there! Thank you for the hearty laugh! much appreciated. and thanks for your time in reading it too as always. 🙂
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My pleasure 🙂
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Awww I felt this 😣
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Hehehehe. Me toooo Ibi! Thank you for reading and stopping by. Glad to see you
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Ouch, this hurt to read, because I always think this kind of post is a little bit autobiographical. It’s a touching piece, though. Hit me right in the feels. 😦
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I totally did my job in evoking that reaction in you then. 🙂 Thank you B! So happy it moved you bc you’re the real poet between the two of us and I’m still needing more practice. Don’t worry. It’s fiction. (wink wink)
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I don’t know if I’m a real poet, but thank you. 🙂
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Your writings are so vibratingly deep, sends chills up my thigh bones.
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So glad you stopped by to read it and that it was moving in your opinion! Thank you so much for reading and the feedback! If you got chills I’m so amazed that I did that.
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Sorry, its Zero degrees here tonight, very chilly
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Ahahahah!! Smartasses are always welcome here!! Hehe
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Whoa. I was going to suggest you and “that dude above” just get a room…but maybe you really need that’s other guy’s cell mate. Anyway, on the poem: Imagining you…or any woman…cry for 9 hours is heartbreaking. Not sure what brought you to that point, but I’m hoping you moved past it or got over it. Thanks for sharing.
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don’t worry it’s fiction. but thank you so much George. and I appreciate what you said. Any person who makes it their business to crush the spirit of another person…that’s right up there with one of the worst evils that exist
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Love it
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much appreciated Joe!!!!
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Beautiful imagery with a shitty topic. Definitely felt this.
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THANKS! yeah i usually hate doing stuff like this but I came up with this quaint idea of a speaker who was congratulating someone for meeting their goal of being effectively mean and getting to the speaker. i feel like another poet could’ve done so much more with it. thanks for reading 🙂
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Nah. You totally nailed it. The simplicity is what makes it perfect. Honestly it feels like a dialogue we’ve all wanted to have. That’s the best kind of writing methinks 😊
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Nice writing… i love it
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Thanks again Felix–I kind of hate it because I don’t really know how I feel about a piece like this but the idea struck me so I gave it a try.
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“So accomplished.”; what a tone. scary for a while.
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Thank you lifeafterfifty!! I’m so glad you appreciated that. There is NO worse horror in the world than any person, no matter who they are, purposefully and premeditated making a point to hurt the spirit of another person and that person letting the other one get to them. that’s the worse part–letting the hate in. Thanks for reading and for your feedback, i mean that.
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